Eyes Breaking

 

Lovers need thoughts in heart,

Rays in their longing sight, no words,

To pierce their hearts.

10 thoughts on “Eyes Breaking

  1. I finally had to comment, yesterday I wrote for the first time Haiku´s for submission to another blogger for his contest. He said he wanted 17 syllables, imagery and juxtapostion. I read the basic examples he gave, and didn´t find any with 17 syllables. I did get to the 17 syllables 5-7-5 and the other elements don´t know if I got them correctly :).

    Is this a Haiku by the way, and why are those basic rules and I keep reading other peoples with very different styles of writing Haikus, is there a basic rule?

    I know I could study it, but my old computer goes to slow so I spend 2 minutes staring at the screen until it uploads a page and then I don´t seem to have enough time in the day to learn all I want about different styles of writing. So I figured I´d be a pain in the ass and ask you.

    By the way, the poem was great 🙂

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    1. Hi, thanks for such big comment, I am not sure about Haiku if we really need to follow the same 5-7-5 rule, for me small poems are more catchy and like tweets.

      I write on my own style which is limited to 5-7-5 syllables.If this is called Haiku, then I accept it. 🙂

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      1. I´m starting to figure out this past hours that I should have fun instead of worrying about technicalities. That´s why I started writing in the first place. Appreciate the feedback.

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